The introduction is turning out to be a three+ page document

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Donna,

My daughter is working on the introduction to her research plan, and it's going on for page after page. I think it's too long, but I'm not sure how tell her to reorganize it.

The main problem seems to be her preliminary study to find distinct regions of Mars to compare craters. She needs the results of the preliminary study to write her hypothesis (which reads in part, "I think the craters in Oxia Palus and Mare Australe will be the deepest for their width because...") The lengthy introduction is describing her background research on the crust and how she chose her 5 regions to study.

Should we have two procedures, and just refer to the results of the first procedure before actually describing it later on in the procedure section? Put the preliminary study in an appendix? Other ideas?

--Janet

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Hi Janet,
Good questions and thanks for asking for our help, this is why we are here. Yes, preliminary research is just that and can be lengthy depending on what the project is pursuing. I am a little unsure of how I can help you, but I will do my best. First what is the question you are trying to answer (i.e. what are you trying to find out)?

The length of research is not uncommon to be about 3-5 pages for a student at her grade level, and adequate background research is necessary to determine the hypothesis. But, you should check with her teacher on the length on the research project and how much involvement you should expect to put into it. The way you described her research, sounds right on point. However, you shouldn't need to perform an experiment BEFORE you come up with a hypothesis, there should be enough information out there to determine an "Estimated Guess"/ hypothesis on your own.

Information on forming your background research:
https://www.sciencebuddies.org/science- ... plan.shtml

Here is more information about forming a hypothesis, https://www.sciencebuddies.org/science- ... hypothesis (you form it based on the research you have done to find additional information you interested in finding out, which it sounds like you have nailed it:

"I think the craters in Oxia Palus and Mare Australe will be the deepest for their width because..."

. To complete that sentence, you could say something like "these craters will be the deepest based on the research I have done studying moon crater width." It is an educated guess (based on your 3 page background research, and tells your guess that those craters will be the deepest in comparison to others).

This may offer an example similar to what you are trying to accomplish:
https://www.sciencebuddies.org/science- ... background

Have you checked out NASA resources?
http://www.nasa.gov/mission_pages/MRO/n ... 90924.html

Hope that helps. Let us know if we can assist further or if anything was unclear.